As the team rushed to run me over,I dashed through their team running swiftly towards the try line.I got there to the tryline just before The opponents tackled me by the leg and I scored. The The crowd went wild. The score was 4 - 12 to the blues. We started again. The other team had the ball.the one with the ball ran past. We tackled and he passed the ball. The other guy ran forward, jumped and scored.
I worked with john from waikowhai intermediate on a shared document. my writing is in red.